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The pie chart represents the source of fish import to Canada and the table shows the total value in Billions of Dollars.

The pie chart represents the source of fish import to Canada and the table shows the total value in Billions of Dollars.
The pie chart indicates the portion of a source of fish imported to
Canada
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 in several years.
Furthermore
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, the table illustrates the amount of value in billions of dollars.
Overall
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,
Canada
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 was importing most of France from other countries in 2010 but the percentage from
China
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 increased significantly in 2015 and 2020.
However
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, the table shows the total values of imports which rise with time. In 2010,
Canada
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 imported 59% of fish demand from other nations,
China
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 24% and Norway 17%.
On the other hand
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, in 2015,
Canada
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's construction in ingredients from
China
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 was 49% which was a rise in the
last
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 five years
also
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, Norway soared to 24% but other areas fell to 27%. During 2020
China
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 and others decreased little from 2015 about 44% and 26%
while
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, Norway increased to 30%. The total value of imports from
Canada
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 got bigger over time. The quality of 2010 was 8.06 billion dough. The ratio in 2015 was still more than 12.94 billion dollars. The
last
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 is 2020 increased drastically and touched 16.52 billion cabbage.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words canada, china with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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