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The bar chart below shows estimated world illiteracy rates by region and by gender for the last year. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows estimated world illiteracy rates by region and by gender for the last year. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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the chart demonstrates the global illiteracy expansion in regional and gender-related measurements in the year 2000.
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 South Asia was the absolute leader in the number of people of lower literacy, the same figure for developed countries was at its lowest.
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, females had the highest rates of illiteracy in every region. focusing on South Asia, Arab states, and Sub-Saharan
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illiteracy amount was dominant in South Asia with a percentage of 55% and just above 30% for women and men, respectively.
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, the same concept for the two laters was lower as
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more than 50% of the feminine society in Arab states and nearly 50% in Sub-Saharan Africa suffered from illiterature.
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, the figure for men in these two regions was at a similar proportion of 30% of the community. moving on to Oceania, it comes
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third place in the world's literacy with 20% of
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women and just below 10% of
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men dealing with
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 of respective knowledge.
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, developed countries standing as the most
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 communities, have shown that solely less than 10% of their society lacks knowledge.
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