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Global warming is one of the biggest threats humans face in the 21st century, and sea levels continue to rise at alarming rate. What problems are associated with this, and what are some possible solutions?

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Climate change is among the principal dangers facing people
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 phenomenon are the loss of land and the flooding of houses and
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 argue that pollution reduction and building
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 protection are the most viable solutions. The foremost problems caused by climbing sea levels are that land is being lost and people’s residences are often flooded. As
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 levels rise, low-lying land is submerged, and many countries become smaller.
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, millions of people worldwide live in coastal areas, and if the sea rises by even a few feet, they are inundated with
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 and lose their property.
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 devastation was clear for all to see during the 2011 Tsunami in Japan, in which millions of people were displaced. Possible solutions to those problems would be to reduce the amount of pollution being created and build
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 barriers. If each person reduces their carbon footprint, the negative effects on the environment will be reduced, which will mean that the
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 level will stop rising.
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,
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 defences,
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 as dikes, dams, and floodgates, could be built along coasts and waterways, thereby stopping the
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 from reaching populated areas.
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, the Netherlands is one of the most populated areas in the world and
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 one of the most vulnerable to flooding, and they have successfully employed various
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 defence systems. In conclusion, stemming the rising tides caused by increasing global temperatures is one of the foremost challenges we face, and it will ultimately lead to some countries losing landmass and many of the world’s cities being left underwater, but possible solutions could be to protect our environment and to utilize the
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 prevention techniques already used by countries like Holland.

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Coherence
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Task Achievement
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Language
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Task Achievement
You have effectively identified and elaborated on the significant problems and solutions related to rising sea levels, aligning well with the prompt.
Coherence
The introduction and conclusion are both clearly present and well-constructed, offering a solid framework for your discussion.
Relevant Examples
You used relevant examples, such as the 2011 Tsunami in Japan and the flood defense systems in the Netherlands, to support your arguments.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • global warming
  • sea levels
  • alarming rate
  • flooding
  • displacement
  • marine ecosystems
  • saltwater intrusion
  • economic consequences
  • coastal infrastructure
  • arable land
  • food security
  • health risks
  • greenhouse gas emissions
  • renewable energy
  • solar power
  • wind power
  • adaptation strategies
  • sea walls
  • coastal defenses
  • sustainable land-use planning
  • zoning laws
  • natural barriers
  • mangroves
  • coral reefs
  • wetlands
  • public awareness
  • eco-friendly practices
  • collective action
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