Fashion trends are difficult to follow these days and it’s widely believed that they primarily exist just to sell clothes. Some people believe that we shouldn’t follow them and that we should dress in what we like and feel comfortable in. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion
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culture
the majority
of trends
are not comfortable
Pursuading
fads and Correct your spelling
Persuading
fashion
tendencies are
tough and the Correct subject-verb agreement
is
majority
of communities believe that fashion
companies
try to make more profit and people
should not imtate
them and just we should follow our interests. I strongly agree with Correct your spelling
imitate
this
statement because not only is missed our culture
and hisorical
customs, but Correct your spelling
historical
also
many of these trends
are not casual.
Nowadays, the majority
of individuals particularly youngsters do not pay attention to the historical customs and these kinds of clothes
being forgotten. Fad companies
try to present different clothes
that are contradictory with
our Change preposition
to
culture
and by following them, society allow
them to increase Change the verb form
allows
production
of anomalous Correct article usage
the production
clothes
. As a consequence
, young people
try to imitate them and it culminates in neglecting traditional dresses and as a result
forgeting
their Correct your spelling
forgetting
culture
. For instance
, many tribes live in Iran that they
have their specific Correct pronoun usage
apply
culture
and traditional customes
that Correct your spelling
customs
customers
being
forgotten and many of the young Add a missing verb
are being
people
have no knowledge about them by pursuading
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pursuing
fashion
trends
.
It is clear that
many fashion
companies
try to produce some clothes
that are sign
and they just Change the verb form
are signed
endeavor
to attract Change the spelling
endeavour
following
. Many Correct article usage
a following
companies
employ numerous famous people
including acter
or Correct your spelling
actors
actress
to wear their products even though they are not comfortable in order to show some issues that exist in the societies. The Fix the agreement mistake
actresses
majority
of these kinds of trends
are not suitable for daily life and are not casual and many of them are
not align with our passion. Verb problem
do
Due to
that people
should not focuse
on the Correct your spelling
focus
trends
and they just follow what they are interested in and make own
style. Correct pronoun usage
their own
For example
, all actors and actresses wear unnormal clothes
in Oscar
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the Oscar
ceremony
which are designed by popular Fix the agreement mistake
ceremonies
companies
like Gucci and some of them are very heavy or made from specific materials that are not suitable for daily life.
In conclusion, fashion
companies
produce various clothes
that we should not follow them
because it leads Correct pronoun usage
apply
to
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us to
forget
our history and traditional Change the verb form
forgetting
customes
, Correct your spelling
customs
customers
moreover
, these kinds of outfits are not produced for normal activities and routine life.Submitted by hadadianmohamadhossein on
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Task Response
Ensure a balanced approach by discussing both views if the question asks for them, even when expressing a strong agreement or disagreement.
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Your essay clearly conveys your opinion, which is good practice in opinion essays.
Coherence and Cohesion
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