Fashion trends are difficult to follow these days and it’s widely believed that they primarily exist just to sell clothes. Some people believe that we shouldn’t follow them and that we should dress in what we like and feel comfortable in. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion

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tough and the

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which are designed by popular

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because it leads

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our history and traditional

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, these kinds of outfits are not produced for normal activities and routine life.

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