The graph below shows the number of trips made by children in one country to travel to and from school in 1990 and 2010 using various modes of transport. Summarise theinformation by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisonswhere relevant. Travel to and from school by children aged 5-12

The graph below shows the number of trips made by children in one country to travel

to and from school in 1990 and 2010 using various modes of transport. Summarise theinformation by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisonswhere relevant.

Travel to and from school by children aged 5-12
The graph illustrates the amount of trips using different transportation that
children
aged 5 - 12 use to go and back from school in 1990 and 2010.
Overall
, it can be clearly seen that
children
being a car
passanger
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passenger
was the least mode of transport to choose in 1990.
However
,
children
as a car
passanger
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passenger
became the most favourite in 2010. In terms of an automobile
passanger
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passenger
,
children
rarely used it in 1990. Accounted for slightly over 4
millions
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per year in 1900, the number of
children
as a car
passanger
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passenger
then
witnessed
a
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growth to 2.5 times than before, reaching
for
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more than 10
millions
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million
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per
years
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and
became
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the most chosen transportation in 2010.
On the other hand
, walking as the most transportation experienced a significant decrease from over 12
millions
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in 1990 to only half of the number in 2010.
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Similarly
Similiarly
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Similarly
, cycling, walking and bus,
as well as
bus
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experienced a downfall to reach just 2
millions
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, 3
millions
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, and 5
millions
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in 2010
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Vocabulary: Replace the words children, passanger, millions with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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