Many believe that modern technology has brought people together, but others say that it has driven us apart. Discuss both viewpoints and give your own opinion.

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It is a common view that modern
technology
has bridged the gap between
people
while
others argue that it has made relationships between
people
become worse.
This
writer holds the belief that the
relationship
of humans become worse
as a result
of today's
technology
. On the
one
hand,
technology
brings many benefits
for
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humans and
the
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society,
one
of them is that
people
can call and talk to their relatives, families and friends around the world anytime, anywhere, whenever they want without any barrier.
This
will help make
people
have a better
relationship
and keep in touch with each other when they are apart. On the
one
hand,
people
nowadays are becoming more and more addicted to
technology
devices like smartphones and social media and refuse to stop
depend
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on them. Nowadays,
instead
of going out with families or hanging out with friends and siblings, we tend to stay at home talking through the screen, and
this
will accidentally push us apart when we do not notice. The screens will become an invisible barrier in
people
's relationships and slowly widen the gaps between humans
due to
the fact that the population need to meet up
face
to
face
when communicating with each other and we
also
use body language and actions to communicate. Talking through the screens will make
people
become shallow
on
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thoughts and emotions and feel isolated for being alone,
this
can make
people
feel lonely or
sometime
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become fear of
communicate
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face
to
face
. in my opinion, I believe that
technology
will make
people
have a worse
relationship
than a better
one
and
people
should only use
technology
devices and social media to contact and stay in touch with each other when they are not staying in the same area or nations.
In addition
,
people
should meet up when they have
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chances
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instead
of calling through phone or apps, being close to together and looking at each other is a good way to narrow the gaps in a
relationship
.
To conclude
,
although
technology
help
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people
to contact
with
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one
another immediately
in
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anytime
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,
this
is a huge
convenient
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for many
people
, but
this
is
also
the major reason that
make
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people
gradually
becoming
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distant.
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relevant specific examples
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clear comprehensive ideas
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introduction conclusion present
Your essay has a clear introduction and conclusion, providing a good framework for your argument.
complete response
The essay addresses both viewpoints, showing an understanding of the complexity of the topic.

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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • connectivity
  • communicate
  • social media
  • virtual meetings
  • global community
  • isolation
  • distract
  • face-to-face interaction
  • personal connections
  • dependency
  • technology addiction
  • digital divide
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