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The graph below shows the number of passenger railway journeys made in Great Britain between 1950 and 2004/5. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of passenger railway journeys made in Great Britain between 1950 and 2004/5. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph illustrates the total of railway journeys used by individuals in the United Kingdom from 1950 to 2004/05.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 both the National
rail network
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Rail Network
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 and the London Underground were built before
Light
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the Light
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 rail and Metro systems.
Moreover
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, The former is still popular
while
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 the latter seems not to be interested in by their citizens.
To begin
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 with, the National network started at 1000 in 1950 and rose to nearly 1100 in 1960. It continuously dropped to 700 in 1980 before increasing and ended at just under 1000. The London
underground
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 began at approximately 700 and unnoticeably decreased by 50 in 1975,
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 it fell to its lowest point in the year after 1980. A surge was seen in the 19th century and it reached a peak at 1100 in 2004/5.
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, the Light rail and metro system in Great Britain were constructed in 1963 and the number of passengers using these systems was around 50. In 1980, It gradually declined to almost 0
however
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 shot up to 100 in the next few years.
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, it swang throughout the period and stopped at roughly 200 in 2004/05

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