The diagram belows show the production of olive oil.

The diagram belows show the production of olive oil.
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The diagram illustrates the process of making olive
oil
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with several methods.
Overall
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, it can be seen that there are seven stages for olive
oil
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manufacturing. The process starts with picking fruits and ends with storage and sale.
To begin
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with, Many olive fruits are picked up by hand from its tree. These fruits will be put into a rinsing machine
that is
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filled with cold water to keep
their
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freshness
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and
then
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belt.
Consequently
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, it will be poured into a smashing machine to separate the solid and liquid form which are olive stones and olive paste.
Additionally
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, These pastes are packed in bags with a lot of holes on the surface. After that, those bags will be moved into a manual pressing tool with six legs.
Furthermore
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, a heavy weight is placed on the pressing to isolate
oil
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and water before the
oil
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is collected and kept in bottles ready for delivery to both storage and sale in department stores.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words oil with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • harvesting
  • mechanized methods
  • impurities
  • crushed
  • malaxation
  • oil molecules
  • extraction
  • pressing
  • centrifugation
  • paste
  • efficiency
  • effectiveness
  • separation
  • purification
  • decantation
  • filtration
  • optimal conditions
  • preserved
  • distribution
  • packaging
  • shelf life
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