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The table below shows the production of milk annually in four countries in 1990. 2000 and 2010. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows the production of milk annually in four countries in 1990. 2000 and 2010. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The table illustrates the
milk
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producted
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produced
 per year in various
country
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countries
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such
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 as the Netherlands,
Australia
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, Tanzania and
Guatemala
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 in 1990, 2000 and 2010.
Overall
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, it can be seen from the table that the Netherlands and
Australia
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 are the higher popular
of
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milk
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 than Tanzania and
Guatemala
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.
According to
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 the information, the
production
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 of
milk
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 in
Netherlands
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the Netherlands
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starting
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started
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 at 11,262,000
litres
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 in 1990
and
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apply
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dropped to 11,155,000
litres
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 in 2000 and increased to 11,466,000
litres
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 in 2010.
Aditionally
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Additionally
, the
production
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 of
milk
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 in
Australia
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 was increasing every period from 11,246,000 , 11,105,000 and 9,165,000
litres
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 from 1990 to 2010, respectively.
However
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, the
production
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 of
milk
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 in Tanzania and
Guatemala
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 is a few
milk
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 when
compare
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compared
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 with other countries.
Milk
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was
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apply
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produced in these countries
are
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has
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increasing
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increased
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 from 87,000 , 142,000 and 155,000
litres
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. As same as the
production
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 of
milk
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 in
Guatemala
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 from 26,000 , 55,000 and 84,000
litres
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 from 1990 to 2010, respectively.
To conclude
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, the
production
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 of
milk
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 in every country
have
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 trend increasing, except the
milk
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 in
Australia
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words milk, australia, guatemala, production, litres with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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