the graph below show the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014
The line graph illustrates the
percentage
of how prices of three metals change
every month in 2014.
Wrong verb form
changed
Overall
, all the proportion
of metals witnessed a downward trend in Fix the agreement mistake
proportions
an
entire period, except the figure for zinc observed a growth trend . The Correct article usage
the
percentage
of nickel made it the most significant surge.
In January, at the top spot is the percentage
of nickel, which stands for 6%, followed by the figure for copper at 2%. At the bottom of the list is zinc, which had the data of 1%.
Take a look at the chart, the proportion of nickel registered a plummet to approximately minus 3% in the next 6 months, then
rose to 1% in November and keep
its position till the end of a period. Wrong verb form
kept
In contrast
,the proportion of zinc rose significantly to 3% in February, before fell
to minus 1% in the next 4 months, Wrong verb form
falling
then
it went up to 2% in the last
month of 2014. Meanwhile, the percentage
of copper recorded a downward trend to 0% in June, then
rose up
slightly to about 1.5% Change preposition
apply
at the end
of the period.Submitted by alicema0503 on
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