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The plans below show how the ground floor of a particular building has changed over time. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

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Introduction
The
plans
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 illustrate how change
of
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in
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 the ground floor
plans
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 between
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office
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offices
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,
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apartment
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apartments
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 and
flower
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shop
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shops
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 in various years from 1958 to
present
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the present
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.
Body paragraph 1
Overall
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, it can be seen from the
plans
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 that the
rooms
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 in
this
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 plan
was change
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was changed
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 to other
rooms
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 in every period. The
detail
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details
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 will
show
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be shown
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 in
this
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 essay.
Body paragraph 2
According to
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 the
plans
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, the
types
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 of
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room
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rooms
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 in
plans
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 were changed from
office
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 to
apartment
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 to other
types
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, except
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kitchen
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the kitchen
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room
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at
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in
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corner
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the corner
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 in 1985.
Additionally
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, the
rooms
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 in
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apartment
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the apartment
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 have very
types
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such
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 as living
room
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, bathroom and shower, bathroom 1, bathroom 2 and
kitchen
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 that
not
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do not
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 change from the original.
Body paragraph 3
Next,
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apartment
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the apartment
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 was
insteaded
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instead
intended
 with
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flower
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a flower
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 shop in
year
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the year
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 2001.
Moreover
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, the plan of
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flower
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the flower
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 shop still
have
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has
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kitchen
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a kitchen
the kitchen
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 as same as the
office
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 in 1958.
In contrast
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, the
types
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 of
rooms
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was
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were
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 changed to Gift cards,
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flower
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flowers
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, play
area
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areas
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 and
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office
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offices
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 until
present
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the present
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.
Conclusion
To conclude
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, the ground floor of
building
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the building
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 still
remain
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has
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kitchen
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a kitchen
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room
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 at the corner of
plan
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the plan
a plan
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 as same as year 1958.

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Introduction
Ensure the introduction clearly outlines the changes without getting into too much detail initially. Begin with a brief summary of what the plans illustrate.
Body Paragraphs
Develop main body paragraphs that clearly differentiate between each period's floor plan changes, ensuring a logical progression from one period to the next.
Linking Words
Use a wider range of linking words and phrases to improve the flow between sentences and paragraphs, enhancing the overall cohesion.
Conclusion
Conclude the essay by summarizing the main changes and maintaining a clear focus on how these changes reflect the overall development over time.
Task Response
The essay addressed the transformation of the ground floor from an office to an apartment and then to a flower shop, covering the main task.
Content Focus
Main points such as the constant presence of the kitchen room are identified, which helps in focusing on significant changes.
Organizational Attempt
The attempt to create a logical structure by dividing changes per period is commendable, laying a foundation for a coherent response.
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    • Sentence 2 - Example
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