The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and

amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between

1920 and 2019.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and

make comparisons where relevant.
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The given line graphs depict how the partnership of electrical devices and the time which was spent doing chores in
household
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the household
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, have
been
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change
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changing
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in one nation from 1920 to 2019. In general,it can be seen that all electrical appliances gained in popularity, and the percentage of households with refrigerators and vacuum cleaners, despite being lowest at the beginning,
were
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was
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highest
at the end
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of the period.
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Additionally
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the washing
machine
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's proportion experienced
the
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a
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dramatically declined.In the second line graph,the
amount
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number
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of
hours
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of
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per
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one
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apply
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week
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decreased gradually during
its
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this
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period. Looking at the line graph which
show
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shows
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the proportion of households with electrical objects,
cooler
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coolers
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went up from 1% to 90% between 1920 and 1960.In 1980
refrigerator
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refrigerators
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reached
the
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a
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peaked
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peak
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at 100% and continued to remain
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at the
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the
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that
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percentage until 2019.Vacuum
sweeper
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sweepers
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stood at 30% in 1920 and shot up to 90% in 1980.From 2000 to 2019 the percentage of
hoover
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Hoover
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jumped to 100%.In terms of washing
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machine
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machines
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,the data increased up to 30% in 1960 compared to its beginning at 40% in 1920.In 1960 there was
the
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an
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intersection between washing
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machine
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machines
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and vacuum
cleaner
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cleaners
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.In the year
of
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1980 washing
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machine
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machines
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experienced a
decreased
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decrease
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to 63% and went up again to 73% in 2029. In the second graph,in 1920 the hour was
at
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50
hours
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per
week
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for one housework.
Then
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the
hour
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hours
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experienced a
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downward
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down trend
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downtrend
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which decreased
gruadually
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gradually
to 20
hours
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per
week
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in 1960 and reached
to
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apply
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the lowest point in 2019 accounting for 10
hours
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per
week
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Vocabulary: Replace the words machine, hours, week with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "graphs" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "went up" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • household appliances
  • time-efficient
  • labour-saving devices
  • technological innovations
  • ownership rate
  • housework chores
  • domestic workload
  • automation
  • advancements
  • trend analysis
  • societal shifts
  • economic impact
  • durability
  • lifespan of appliances
  • maintenance
  • historical comparison
  • time allocation
  • drudgery reduction
  • energy consumption
  • disruption in trends
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