Nowadays , women as well as men work full time. Therefore, women and men should share household tasks equally. ( eg cleaning and looking after children ).To what extent do you agree or disagree?

In these years,
women
are able to work all day as
men
. Some individuals think that
women
and
men
ought to divide their domestic tasks equally
such
as looking after children,
cleaning
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and cleaning
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. From my
perspecive
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perspective
,
men
should undertake more responsibilities of house income. There are two essential points which can its advantages outshine the disadvantages.
Firstly
,
men
's
job
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jobs
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can be tougher than
women
's
job
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jobs
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due to
ability
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the ability
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of
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the human's
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human's
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human
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body.
Women
can have some problems
while
they are trying to find
jobs
.
For instance
, a company which is about construction is looking for
some
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apply
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employees that
capable
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are capable
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of
carry
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carrying
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heavy bricks. It is obvious that they would prefer the worker that male because of his muscles, and it can lead them to be
kneckered
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knackered
after their job.
Therefore
, they might not be able to
houshold
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household
missions after their shift and it can lead
women
to make most of the domestic
jobs
.
Secondly
,
women
's nature is more polite and
pratics
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pratic
than
men
's
such
as
women
's ability at manual
works
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work
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is much better than
men
's without any doubts. It can lead
women
to make more
stuffs
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stuff
kinds of stuff
pieces of stuff
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at home.
While
male people can take some responsibilities
about
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for
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washing or cleaning, they might not be as good as
women
at looking after children.
For example
, nowadays, having a baby has numerous hardships for both
women
and
men
, but when we look at the hardest
jobs
,
women
can be more accountable to take
that
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those
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jobs
because of their talents at
this
kind of
staffs
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staff
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.
As a result
,
women
can be more capable of household
task
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tasks
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. In conclusion, nowadays,
women
can work as long as
men
can.
Therefore
, some people say two genders should share their house
jobs
fifty fifty
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. I do not
agree
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agree on
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this
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the
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idea that
men
should take more
responsible
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responsibility
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for house profits and
women
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that women
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ought to undertake
househould
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household
staffs
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staff
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due to
their capabilities.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Gender roles
  • Evolved
  • Gender equality
  • Economic necessity
  • Household responsibilities
  • Parenting
  • Child-rearing
  • Equitable
  • Family dynamics
  • Skill development
  • Empathy
  • Cultural norms
  • Societal expectations
  • Egalitarian
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