As computers are being used more and more in education, there will be soon no role for teachers in the classroom

Modern world technological development spread all over human activities and Online
education
has become the most popular in learning efforts. Physical teaching under the supervisor is going to be reduced. In my opinion, I like to discuss that it is not true and I do not agree with
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learning does not sense without teachers, because Primary students and
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curriculum do not succeed via Zoom teaching. As an example, is how we can teach the starting of writing alphabets to
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toddlers.
Teacher
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must handle the child's hands to write spelling with the pencil.
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, there is no sensible entertainment in studying in front of a computer.
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exposing blue rays for a long time could damage retinal cells and cause vision problems.
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area of the eye and
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pedagogy and
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studying
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may be useful
education
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online learning limited peer group activities and
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experimental investigations
such
as science lab practicals and agriculture field investigations like tutorials. In my conclusion, in front of a computer
education
is not as successful as physical
education
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health and reduces human relationships, sympathy and empathy.
Submitted by amalitharangani0Most of villagers are changing their accommodations from villages to cities all around the world. As a result of this countryside residents are lower than town areas.I think this is a negative development and in this essay, I will elaborate my perspectives furthermore. According to this situation, my take on this is, different of the facilities between the town and the village. As an example, there are lots of shopping centres in the city such as house- hold items, clothes, stationeries, vehicles and so on. Conversely, developed educational centres, schools, hospitals with enough facilities are also at the urban areas. Nevertheless, there are lots of companies and unlimited job opportunities in the city area. Also, mostly there are continuous electricity, gas,water and well planned and punctual transport system as well. So people prefer to live in comfortably and moving to cities as they possible. Additionally, villagers and town people's have same basic need. Such as food, accommodation, education, good health and freedom as well. In some countries there is unavailable electricity in the countryside. Also, there is poor transport system, teachers and facilities at village schools. Moreover, sometimes not enough medications and human resources. So countryside people preferred to move to town. Finally, countryside population decreased and urbanisation in cities. In a nutshell, if there is as usual same facilities all over the city and rural areas,as there is lots of freedom in the countryside . My point of view is around the world this point is most prominent in developing countries. on

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