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The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The two maps illustrate the
road
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 network around a
City
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 Hospital in 2007 and 2010.
Overall
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, it is noticeable that the
road
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 access to the
city
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 hospital was upgraded in 2010 with the addition of a
bus
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 station, two roundabouts and a separate public
car
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park
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. In 2007, the hospital
road
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, which had three
bus
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 stops on either
side
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, was connected to the
city
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road
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 and to the ring
road
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.
Furthermore
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, a common
car
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park
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 was located on the east
side
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 of the hospital
road
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, and it served both the public and staff members. In 2010, some significant changes could be seen.
Firstly
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, the common
car
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park
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 was assigned exclusively to the hospital staff,
while
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 a novel public
car
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park
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 was established on the east
side
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 of the hospital.
Secondly
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, two roundabouts had been constructed at both ends of the hospital
road
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; one at the intersection with the ring
road
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 and the other at the
city
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road
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 junction.
Finally
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, the three
bus
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 stops on either
side
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 had been removed, and a new
bus
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 station was constructed on the west
side
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 of the hospital
road
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 with connections to both newly built roundabouts.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words road, city, bus, car, park, side with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • infrastructure
  • improvements
  • facilitate
  • congestion
  • junctions
  • streamline
  • traffic flow
  • reduce congestion
  • public transport
  • bus station
  • efficiency
  • accessibility
  • parking facilities
  • car park
  • designated
  • alleviate
  • issues
  • adequate space
  • enhancements
  • overall accessibility
  • traffic management
  • convenience
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