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The maps show Pacific Railway Station station in 1998 and now. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The maps show Pacific Railway Station station in 1998 and now. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The maps provide key information about the changes
have
Correct pronoun usage
that have
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 taken in
Pacific
Correct article usage
the Pacific
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 Railway Station from its establishment in 1998 to the
recent
Correct your spelling
present
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 day.
Overall
, it is clear from the maps that there is a significant change for
platforms
at
Change preposition
on
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 the opposite
side
.
In addition
, a modern supermarket has been constructed.
Whereas
, toilets were replaced by new services.
According to
 what is shown in 1998, there is only one roadway platform on one
side
.
Moreover
, the cafe, shop and ticket office are adjacent to the
platforms
.
While
 the bathrooms
was
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were
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 beside the left of
platforms
Correct article usage
the platforms
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. In terms of the recent infrastructure for Pacific Railway
Station
Add a comma
Station,
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 there is a variety of changes have taken place
in
Change preposition
on
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 the opposite
left
Correct word choice
apply
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side
 by
built
Wrong verb form
building
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a new railway
Correct the article-noun agreement
a new railway platform
new railway platforms
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platforms
 with only three lines.
Additionally
,
In
Change preposition
On
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 the same
side
 of the
layout
Add a comma
layout,
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a
Change the article
the
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 newest supermarket has been constructed.
Furthermore
, the toilets
has
Change the verb form
have
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 been
destructed
Verb problem
destroyed
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 to build new
restaurant
Fix the agreement mistake
restaurants
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 and shops in the
center
Change the spelling
centre
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,
instead
 of
shop
Add an article
the shop
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was
Replace the word
being
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 between
cafe
Correct article usage
the cafe
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 and
ticket
Correct article usage
the ticket
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 office.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 83%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words platforms, side with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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