The plans below show how the ground floor of a particular building has changed over time.
The plans illustrate how the ground
floor
of an unknown building has changed into three different purposes: office
, apartment, and flower
shop, during
1958 Change preposition
from
untill
now.
Correct your spelling
until
Overall
, it can be clearly observed that the floor
was renovated for different usages which includes some changes such
as removing and building new
Correct article usage
a new
area
. However
, it is interesting to note that the kitchen and entrance remained the same untill
Correct your spelling
until
present
.
Correct article usage
the present
To begin
with, in 1958-1984 this
ground floor
was used as an office
. Each room
was divided into both side
of the building leaving an empty aisle in the center. Change to a plural noun
sides
Reception
Add an article
The reception
area
can be found to the right
next to the entrance and the toilet is the
opposite Change preposition
on the
side
. The Office
area
was located in the center
of the plan Change the spelling
centre
in
Change preposition
with
which
the Correct pronoun usage
apply
Manager
Change noun form
Manager's
office
on the right
and secretary
and Correct article usage
the secretary
asssisant's
offices Correct your spelling
assistant's
to
the left Change preposition
on
side
. At the top of the plan, the meeting room
is on the left corner
facing with the kitchen on the other corner
.
Meanwhile, in
1985-2000, the Change preposition
from
floor
turned into an apartment instead
. The Manager
Change noun form
Manager's
office
and reception area
were replaced with Correct article usage
a Bedrooms
Bedrooms
Change the noun form
bedroom
area
and the meeting room
turned
into a living Add a missing verb
was turned
room
. The Bathroom and shower were expand
into a bigger Change the verb form
were expanded
were expanding
area
. Lastly
, in
2001 Change preposition
from
untill
now, the ground Correct your spelling
until
floor
then
change
into a Wrong verb form
changed
flower
shop. The bathroom turned into a play area
. Further
inside, the Flower
zone are
located at the bottom Change the verb form
is
right
corner
of the plan and the other is adjacent, next to the play area
. The Office
is located between the kitchen and the flower
zone on the right
side
. The top left corner
are gift cards zone.Submitted by kamonluck1999 on
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Introduction conclusion present
Provide a brief conclusion to round off your essay. Summarize the main changes observed over the years.
Introduction conclusion present
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Complete response
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Clear comprehensive ideas
You've effectively summarized the major transformations of the ground floor across different periods.
Relevant specific examples
Your descriptions of the changes were specific and relevant, providing a clear understanding of the building's evolution.
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