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The plans below show how the ground floor of a particular building has changed over time.

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The plans illustrate how the ground
floor
 of an unknown building has changed into three different purposes:
office
, apartment, and
flower
 shop,
during
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from
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 1958
untill
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until
 now.
Overall
, it can be clearly observed that the
floor
 was renovated for different usages which includes some changes
such
 as removing and building
new
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a new
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area
.
However
, it is interesting to note that the kitchen and entrance remained the same
untill
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until
present
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the present
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.
To begin
 with, in 1958-1984
this
 ground
floor
 was used as an
office
. Each
room
 was divided into both
side
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sides
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 of the building leaving an empty aisle in the center.
Reception
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The reception
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area
 can be found to the
right
 next to the entrance and the toilet is
the
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on the
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 opposite
side
. The
Office
area
 was located in the
center
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centre
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 of the plan
in
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with
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which
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apply
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the
Manager
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Manager's
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office
 on the
right
 and
secretary
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the secretary
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 and
asssisant's
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assistant's
 offices
to
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on
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 the left
side
. At the top of the plan, the meeting
room
 is on the left
corner
 facing with the kitchen on the other
corner
. Meanwhile,
in
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from
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 1985-2000, the
floor
 turned into an apartment
instead
. The
Manager
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Manager's
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office
 and reception
area
 were replaced with
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a Bedrooms
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Bedrooms
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bedroom
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area
 and the meeting
room
turned
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was turned
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 into a living
room
. The Bathroom and shower
were expand
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were expanded
were expanding
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 into a bigger
area
.
Lastly
,
in
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from
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 2001
untill
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until
 now, the ground
floor
then
change
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changed
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 into a
flower
 shop. The bathroom turned into a play
area
.
Further
 inside, the
Flower
 zone
are
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 located at the bottom
right
corner
 of the plan and the other is adjacent, next to the play
area
. The
Office
 is located between the kitchen and the
flower
 zone on the
right
side
. The top left
corner
 are gift cards zone.
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Logical structure
Ensure the essay contains a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and conclusion for better structure and readability.
Introduction conclusion present
Provide a brief conclusion to round off your essay. Summarize the main changes observed over the years.
Introduction conclusion present
Use a wider range of linking words and phrases to demonstrate clear transitions and relationships between ideas.
Complete response
Maintain a consistent overview of the changes throughout your essay, and avoid overly detailed descriptions that may detract from the clarity of main changes.
Clear comprehensive ideas
You've effectively summarized the major transformations of the ground floor across different periods.
Relevant specific examples
Your descriptions of the changes were specific and relevant, providing a clear understanding of the building's evolution.

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