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The pie charts below show the devices people in the 18 to 25 age group use to watch television in Canada in different years

The pie charts below show the devices people in the 18 to 25 age group use to watch television in Canada in different years
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The two pie graphs provide information about the
people
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 who are aged between 18 to 25 years who are involved in watching
television
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 in two time periods (2009 and 2019) in Canada.
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, Conventional TV had the majority of
people
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's attention and the lowest proportion was
Tablet
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Tablets
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 in the year 2009, Minor portion of
the
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people
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 used Conventional
TVs
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 and the highest percentage acquired by Flat-Screen
TVs
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 in 2019. In 2009, a prominent proportion of adults (34%) were consuming Conventional
TVs
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 to watch
television
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,
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 Tablets were the least with 5% and in 2019, the trend of conventional
TVs
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 completely reversed which dropped to a tiny fraction, Flat-screen
TVs
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 and mobile phones had the significant majority of youngsters utilization with 27% and 26% respectively. A large proportion of Laptops (20%) and desktop computers (18%) and a small minority of Flat-screen
TVs
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 are used by youngsters for watching
television
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. An equal percentage of majors consume Laptops and Desktop computers for the purpose of watching
Television
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 and Tablets are 19% of
people
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's utilization.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, television, tvs with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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