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In some countries, companies allow people to work from home. In others, people are still expected to work in an office.

#countries #companies #people #work #home #office
Some people think that
company
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companies
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 allow to
work
 from
home
,
while
 others think that people should
work
 in the
office
. In the following paragraphs, both
view
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views
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 of
this
 topic will be discussed in detail before
conclusion
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a conclusion
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 is reached. On the one hand, the
worker
 who
was
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were
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 allowed
from
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by
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company
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the company
a company
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for
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to
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work
 from
home
have
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has
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convenience
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the convenience
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to
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of working
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work
 everywhere
such
 as their
home
, coffee shop or everywhere
if
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they want.
Moreover
, they are unnecessary to wear the uniform
of
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office
,
can
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one can
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 wear
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a t-shirt
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t-shirt
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T-shirt
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 and short
pant
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pants
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,
it
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which
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 will help the
worker
to
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apply
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save
the
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money to clean the uniform.
Work
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Working
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 from
home
have
Verb problem
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 others flexibility
such
 as eating and listening to music together.
However
, if has some problem
in
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at
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work
 it may
have
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be
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some
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apply
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difficult to ask
with
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the boss.
On the other hand
,
Work
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Working
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 in the
office
have
Verb problem
is
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 more effective in
work
 because
worker
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workers
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 cannot
lazy
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be lazy
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 to
work
 when working in the
office
. The
office
 can check who
have
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has
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 working performance or not.
Additionally
, when
worker
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workers
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 have
question
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questions
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, they can ask the boss directly without
the
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a
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 problem
such
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apply
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as
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apply
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when they want to know the personal information of
boss
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the boss
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 to use in business they can ask directly without the evidence in chat, some evidence is
the
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secrete,
for example
 credit card ID or national ID.
Although
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, working in the
office
have
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has
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 some
difficult
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difficulties
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 for someone who
like
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likes
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 to
listening
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listen
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 to music
for
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to
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 relax when working. In conclusion, it can be seen that despite these two opinions on where is
suitable
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a suitable
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 place for
working
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, it is
very
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a very
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 personal question for them. Both of these have benefits and drawbacks.
Therefore
 they should be considered by themselves.
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