In today's world, the spread of computer use has changed our way of living so that people can buy many things through the Internet. Discuss some advantages and disadvantages of Internet shopping.
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change
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lifestyle
resident
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residents
like able
to buy goods Correct your spelling
likeable
by
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via
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the internet
internet
. Capitalize word
Internet
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buy through Add a comma
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the internet
internet
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Internet
people
are at a loss. for the following reasons.
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provided
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of thing
thing
some Fix the agreement mistake
things
people
can find what them
want to buy, because easier to order through Change the pronoun
they
platfrom
, Correct your spelling
platforms
for
instance
shoope, lazada, Add the comma(s)
instance,
buka lapak
, tokopedia, Correct your spelling
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and
etc. Correct word choice
apply
in
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plafrom
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go
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to go
shope
, and also
we no need using car only waiting at home.
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that, some Replace the word
Besides
people
agrue
online Correct your spelling
argue
agree
shope
will kill physical shope
, due to
in this
recent world
people
extreamly choose buies some things by platfrom makeing
physical Correct your spelling
platforms making
shope
quite
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quiet
such
as shop properti
, small Correct your spelling
properties
shope
, and market
. Fix the agreement mistake
markets
in
addition
online Add a comma
addition,
shope
will be killer
income Correct article usage
a killer
people
wich still stand Change preposition
for people
shope
offline, therefore
has
a few Correct subject-verb agreement
have
oppertunity
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opportunities
such
as we unabel pay later.
Furthermore
, we must relize
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realize
realise
deplove
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deploy
deplore
world
wich
year to year the most Correct your spelling
which
shopciated
. in Correct your spelling
associated
this
modern world
a lot using Add a comma
world,
internet
and from our Correct article usage
the internet
people
must following
to do Change the verb form
follow
be following
anyitng
, Correct your spelling
anything
thererfore
we must learn Correct your spelling
therefore
concercing
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concerning
such
as how to using
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use
internet
, how to look for information.
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internet
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the internet
adventages
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advantages
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but depend on each other Correct your spelling
disadvantages
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ultimately
provide
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