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Some think that politicians should always be honest while others feel that there are times when they must lie. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.

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To begin
, most
people
 think that politicians always should be honest, on the other of the argument lies the opposition viewpoint, which is that other
people
 believe there are intervals times force the responsible to lie. on the one hand , human nature refuses any bad ethical and considers the
truth
 as a personal ethical,
thus
truth
 humans respect and encourage each other and
not
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do not
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 expect any other action,
hence
, earning the respect of
people
making
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and making
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 it harder for politicians to commute between work and the required ethicals.
on the other hand
 , as it is known , handling every situation
required
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requires
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 different ways,
Moreover
, there is no specific path for officials to follow.
thus
 that attempts to keep community safety by trying to prevent the scaring of
people
 and to provide emotional backing.
for instance
, if there is an expected coming war,
then
, the politicians have two options which are either
truth
 or lie, seemingly safety or panic.
To conclude
,I strongly believe that the
truth
 is superior to the opposite. Because if cannot tell the
truth
 just remain silent.
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Coherence & Cohesion
Ensure clarity in structuring arguments, separating distinct views clearly to avoid confusion.
Task Achievement
Develop your ideas more fully with detailed examples and explanations to strengthen your argument.
Language
Use varied and accurate language to express your viewpoints. Avoid repetition and aim for precise vocabulary.
Task Achievement
You've presented a balanced view by discussing both sides of the argument.
Task Achievement
The inclusion of a clear opinion in the conclusion helps fulfill the task requirements.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • integrity
  • transparency
  • ethical dilemma
  • diplomatic tact
  • misinformation
  • public trust
  • social fabric
  • national security
  • pragmatic politics
  • democratic principles
  • accountability
  • role models
  • grey area
  • public perception
  • preventive secrecy
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