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The bar chart below shows estimated world illiteracy rates by regions and by gender for the last year.

The bar chart below shows estimated world illiteracy rates by regions and by gender for the last year.
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The bar chart compares assumed world
illiteracy
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 rates by region and by gender for the
last
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 year.
Overall
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, in all cases, the the
illiteracy
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 rate among women was higher than
men
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among men
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. Developed
countries
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 had almost ignorable
illiteracy
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rate
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rates
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.
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, about half of the population in South
Asia
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, Arab states and Africa were illiterate. The
illiteracy
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 rate in Latin America / Caribbean and East
Asia
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 / Oceania was only 1
percent
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per cent
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, 10 
percent
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per cent
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 and 14
percent
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 respectively considering both
male
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males
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 and
female
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females
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. Sub-Saharan Africa, the Arab States and South
Asia
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 had rates of approximately 40%, 41% and 45%. Illiterate women were higher than
the
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illiterate men in all the given
countries
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. In the developed
countries
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, the proportion of literacy among men and female was almost similar but the differences increased for
Asia
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, Arab states and Africa. Among the given 6
countries
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, the South Asian population were far more illiterate than any other country.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words illiteracy, countries, asia with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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