The line graph shows the average number of weekly patients visiting four clinics of a hospital from 2010 to 2016
Contained in the line graph is information pertaining to the different
number
of Fix the agreement mistake
numbers
patients
visiting various clinics of a hospital in
Change preposition
at
weekend
over 6 years, starting from 2010.
Fix the agreement mistake
weekends
Overall
, it can be observed that all figures have an upward trend, expect
Birth control. Correct your spelling
except
Moreover
, the number
of eye
was the highest Change to a plural noun
eyes
while
Diabetic was the lowest point in this
picture.
Looking at the number
of illness
Replace the word
ill
citizens
who went to
Birth control Change preposition
apply
was
started at around 20 in 2010 Unnecessary verb
apply
then
reached the top of 270 illness
people between 2010 and 2014 after Replace the word
ill
went
down Wrong verb form
going
at
the final period Change preposition
in
with
240 Change preposition
to
patients
. In addition
, the clinics of eye
in a hospital was Add an article
the eye
an eye
rised
slowly to 10 Correct your spelling
raised
illness
Replace the word
ill
citizens
in 2012 and reached at
peak in 2016 with 30 sick individuals, Correct your spelling
a
it
was the highest Correct pronoun usage
which
number
in this
graph.
Moving on to the number
of citizens
who went to
Diabetic in 2010 was 100 Verb problem
were
then
it decreased in 2012 with
nearly 50 but it climbed up to 130 Change preposition
to
patients
in 2016. Furthermore
, the number
of citizens
ho
went up Correct your spelling
who
at
100 Change preposition
to
patients
between 2014 and 2016 then
reached at
140 Change preposition
apply
patients
at the end
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