The line graph shows the average number of weekly patients visiting four clinics of a hospital from 2010 to 2016

The line graph shows the average number of weekly patients visiting four clinics of a hospital from 2010 to 2016
Contained in the line graph is information pertaining to the different
number
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numbers
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of
patients
visiting various clinics of a hospital
in
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weekend
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over 6 years, starting from 2010.
Overall
, it can be observed that all figures have an upward trend,
expect
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Birth control.
Moreover
, the
number
of
eye
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was the highest
while
Diabetic was the lowest point in
this
picture. Looking at the
number
of
illness
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citizens
who went
to
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Birth control
was
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started at around 20 in 2010
then
reached the top of 270
illness
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people between 2010 and 2014 after
went
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down
at
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the final period
with
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240
patients
.
In addition
, the clinics of
eye
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the eye
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in a hospital was
rised
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raised
slowly to 10
illness
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citizens
in 2012 and reached
at
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peak in 2016 with 30 sick individuals,
it
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was the highest
number
in
this
graph. Moving on to the
number
of
citizens
who
went to
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Diabetic in 2010 was 100
then
it decreased in 2012
with
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nearly 50 but it climbed up to 130
patients
in 2016.
Furthermore
, the
number
of
citizens
ho
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who
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went up
at
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100
patients
between 2014 and 2016
then
reached
at
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140
patients
at the end
of the graph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words number, patients, citizens with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "went down" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 3 times.
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