The map below show a beachfront area in Australia in 1950 and today.

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Contained in the two maps is information pertaining to changes which happened in an Australian coastal location between 1950 and the present day. Generally speaking, it can be recognized that the area has seen a significant improvement in tourist facilities.

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, the majority of public amenities remained untouched. Being with the northern-west half of the beach, as far as the playground was concerned. It has been demolished and replaced with a car park. With respect to the car park in the north, the dining tables and pavilion persisted unchanged adjacent next to it. Turning to the eastern part of the zone where the road has been extended to the lighthouse with a surf club have been built behind it. Moving onto the southwest where the 25 metres has been relocated and expanded near the beach to a 50 metres pool. Regarding the pool in the west, they have constructed a new restaurant and a surf club in the vicinity of the pool.

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The map below show a beachfront area in Australia in 1950 and today.

Nowadays many young people leave home at an early age and live in a city. Why do you think they move to cities? Do you think this has more advantages or disadvantages for young people?

Throughout the history, people dream to live in a perfect society while they haven’t agreed how the ideal society would be like. What is the most important element you think to make a perfect society? What do people do to achieve an ideal society?

Some people believe that men and women are equal and so women should be able to do any job they want. Others feel that men and women are not equal and therefore there are certain jobs which are not suitable for women. What is your opinion?

Some people feel the best way to reduce the number of accidents on the road is to further limit the speed of vehicles. Others think that there are better ways to tackle this issue. Discuss both views and give your own opinion