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The line graph shows the percentages of Australian exports with four countries. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant You should write at least 150 words.

The line graph shows the percentages of Australian exports with four countries. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant You should write at least 150 words.
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The line graph illustrates the proportion of
Australian
exports
 with various countries
such
 as
Japan
,
US
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the US
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,
China
 and
india
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India
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 between 1990 and 2012.
Overall
, it
ca
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can
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ne
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be
 seen that the
Australian
exports
 to
China
 and
India
 were
increased
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an increased
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 trend.
While
,
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apply
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 the
exports
 to
Japan
 and
Us were
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the US
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 decreased.
According to
 the information,
China
 and
India
was
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were
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 exported by
Australian
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Australia
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at
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in
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 1990
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by apporoximately
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apporoximately
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approximately
 3
percentages
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per cent
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. After that,
exports
toChina
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to China
 and
India
inceased
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increased
 to 11 and 5
percentages
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per cent
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 in 2005, respectively. In
year
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the year
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 2010,
China
was
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apply
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increased dramatically to 25
percentages
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per cent
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.
Although
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However
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,
India
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apply
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was
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apply
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slight increase
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slightly increased
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exports
 to 7
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per cent
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percentages
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per cent
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.
At the end
 of
period
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the period
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,
China
was
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apply
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rise
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rose
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 to 28
percentages
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per cent
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 but
India
 dropped to 5
percentages
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per cent
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.
Additionally
, the
Australia
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Australian
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people
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people's
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export
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exports
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 to
Japan
 and
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the Us
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Us
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US
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 in 1990
stared
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started
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 at 26 and 11
percentages
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per cent
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, respectively. In 1995 both
country
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countries
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was
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were
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 down to 20 and 8
percentages
. In the next five years,
exports
 to
japan
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Japan
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 still
down
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be down
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 to 18
percentages
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per cent
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.
In contrast
, the
Australian
export
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exports
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 to Us was growed up to 12
percentages
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per cent
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. In
year
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the year
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 2012,
Japan
 and US
was
Verb problem
showed
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moderate
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a moderate
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 decrease to 11 and 6
percentages
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per cent
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.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words australian, exports, japan, china, india, percentages with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 11 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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