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The line graph shows the percentages of Australian exports with four countries. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

The line graph shows the percentages of Australian exports with four countries. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant
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The line graph illustrates the proportion of
Australian
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exports
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 with various countries
such
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 as
Japan
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,
US
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the US
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,
China
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 and
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india
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India
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 between 1990 and 2012.
Overall
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, it
ca
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can
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ne
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be
 seen that the
Australian
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exports
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 to
China
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 and
India
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 were
increased
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an increased
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 trend.
While
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,
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apply
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 the
exports
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 to
Japan
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 and
Us were
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the US
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 decreased.
According to
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 the information,
China
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 and
India
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was
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were
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 exported by
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Australian
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Australia
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at
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in
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 1990
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by apporoximately
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apporoximately
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approximately
 3
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percentages
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per cent
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. After that,
exports
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toChina
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to China
 and
India
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inceased
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increased
 to 11 and 5
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percentages
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per cent
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 in 2005, respectively. In
year
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the year
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 2010,
China
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was
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apply
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increased dramatically to 25
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percentages
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per cent
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.
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Although
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However
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,
India
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Verb problem
apply
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was
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apply
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slight increase
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slightly increased
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exports
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 to 7
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per cent
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percentages
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per cent
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.
At the end
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 of
period
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the period
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,
China
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was
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apply
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rise
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rose
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 to 28
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percentages
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per cent
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 but
India
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 dropped to 5
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percentages
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per cent
show examples
.
Additionally
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, the
Australia
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Australian
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people
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people's
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export
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exports
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 to
Japan
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 and
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the Us
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Us
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US
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 in 1990
stared
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started
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 at 26 and 11
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percentages
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per cent
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, respectively. In 1995 both
country
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countries
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was
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were
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 down to 20 and 8
percentages
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. In the next five years,
exports
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 to
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japan
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Japan
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 still
down
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be down
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 to 18
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percentages
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per cent
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.
In contrast
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, the
Australian
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export
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exports
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 to Us was growed up to 12
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percentages
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per cent
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. In
year
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the year
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 2012,
Japan
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 and US
was
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showed
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moderate
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a moderate
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 decrease to 11 and 6
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percentages
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per cent
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.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words australian, exports, japan, china, india, percentages with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 11 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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