The following diagram shows how greenhouse gases trap energy from the Sun.

The following diagram shows how greenhouse gases trap energy from the Sun.
The flowchart provides key information about the trapping of
Sun
energy for greenhouse gases.
Overall
, it is clear from the graph that human activities play a crucial role in the creation of carbon dioxide.
In addition
,
sun
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can affect the heating underground and reflect into the space.
Whereas
, extra carbon dioxide
reflected
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off
atmosphere
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the atmosphere
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.
According to
what is shown, human activities
such
as factories and transportation have
a critical ways
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a critical way
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to increase the
Co2
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CO2
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into space by burning fossil fuels.
Moreover
, cutting
forest
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can damage the underground atmosphere
as well as
increase the carbon dioxide. In terms of the
sun
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impact
to
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greenhouses
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gases there
is
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a various stages for
this
process, Starting with the
sun
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shine into sacrifice can
creat
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create
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heating.
However
,
this
step will demonstrate
to
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burning the Co2
then
heating energy radiated into space.
While
the reflection of
sun light
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sunlight
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at
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clouds will increase the heating. Meanwhile, the heat trapped by
greenhouses
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greenhouse
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gases,
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