The chart shows British emigration to selected destinations between 2004 and 2007 . Summarize the information and make comparison. Write at least 150 words.

The chart shows British emigration to selected destinations between 2004 and 2007 . Summarize the information and make comparison. Write at least 150 words.
The bar chart provides key information about emigration to select destinations in
United
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the United
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Kingdom from 2004 to 2007.The units are measured in
thousand
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thousands
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.
Overall
, it is clear from the graph that
Asutralia
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Australia
.
In addition
, 2006
is
Verb problem
had
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the highest rate,
whereas
the
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apply
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New Zealand
is
Verb problem
had
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the
less
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lowest
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ratio in 2006.
According to
what is shown, Spain is the second higher
between
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of
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the 5 countries in 2004 and 2005 the ratio
reatched
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reached
to 35 thousand when 2006
were
Unnecessary verb
apply
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was 32 and 2007
is
Unnecessary verb
apply
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the less one. In 2004 the ratio
in
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between
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USA
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the USA
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and France
reatched
Correct your spelling
reached
out
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apply
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to the same level
in
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at
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23 thousand when
was
Verb problem
apply
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in 2005
USA
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the USA
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were 16 and France
is
Wrong verb form
was
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34. 2006 in
USA
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the USA
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is 22 and in France is 25
whereas
2007 in both countries
were
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was
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in
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at
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the same level.
To sum
up
Add a comma
up,
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Australia have
the
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a
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higher rate compared to
others
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other
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countries.
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