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The diagrams below show a community center's changes in the last ten years. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagrams below show a community center's changes in the last ten years. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The information of changes in community
centre
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 from
last
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 ten year to now.
Overall
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, the graph shows many changes, but parking, kitchen and reception are at the same place in the same
area
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.
Whereas
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, other areas are changed. Looking at statistics, the
centre
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 of
this
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 community
centre
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 had an entrance and reception which remained in the same place.
However
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, there was a café and toilet on the right side of reception which is replaced by an office now. After that, the hall with 100 seats is still there. 10 years ago, there was a storage room which is added toilet with
this
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 now. The Garden and Parking were on the left side of a community center 10 years ago but without touching parking, they built Indoor sports in the garden
area
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.
Moreover
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, on the right side of
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centre
Correct article usage
the centre
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, before, it had four offices which were replaced by Café
Area
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.
Then
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, the Kitchen is in the same place with the same
area
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 as before.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words centre, area with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • community center
  • renovation
  • layout
  • features
  • modifications
  • additions
  • facilities
  • functionality
  • accessibility
  • sustainable initiatives
  • eco-friendly
  • development
  • functional improvements
  • visual enhancements
  • local population
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