In many countries, the number of people suffering from stress is increasing. What do you think are the causes of this problem and what measures could be taken to tackle it? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words.
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Task Achievement
Try to explore a wider range of causes and solutions for stress beyond economic factors to fully address the task.
Task Achievement
Clarify the connection between your examples and your main points. Specific, real-life examples could strengthen your argument.
Coherence & Cohesion
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Coherence & Cohesion
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Coherence & Cohesion
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Structure
You provided a clear introduction and conclusion, setting out your essay's structure effectively.
Content
You successfully established a main cause of stress (economic factors) and suggested a potential solution (adjusting tax laws).
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