“Doing an enjoyable activity with a child can develop better skills and more creativity than reading. To what extent do you agree? Use reasons and specific examples to explain your answer”

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There is no denying the fact that parents are the backbone
for
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their kids and they have
the
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significant influence on them. Some people,
however
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, deem that playing with
childrens
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have
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better
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effect rather than reading
books
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. From my
prespective
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, I believe that reading in
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childhood is not effective as much as enjoyable activities.
To begin
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with, reading is not only complex for children but
also
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booring
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boring

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. It is
also
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possible to say that, kids are full of energy and they always want to play, draw and run which made reading for them an issue. Because, in terms of reading, they should have
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a quite

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quite
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quiet

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place and concentrate
in
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the
books
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In addition
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,
books
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are full of
complecated
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complicated

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sentinces
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sentences
sentence

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what
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which

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make
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makes

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it a challenge for the child.
For example
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, if we want to
learn
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teach

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them how much smoking is harmful, we could put a
pice
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piece

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of cotton in
small
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a small

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glass and put it in
smoking
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a smoking

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area after weeks the cotton will be black
then
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he will accommodate how much
is
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smoking is
harmfu
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harmful

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but if he read about it he will never
understande
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understand

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as much as these
experiance
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experience
experiences

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. Another point to
cosider
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consider

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, playing games with them could increase their levels in school.
In other words
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, when we teach children in
the
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acadmic
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academic

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way they get boored
then
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they start to ignore school but if we
tech
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teach

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them math as a game it will be more
intersted
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interesting

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Moreover
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, they will always influence
from
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apply

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people how
give
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to give

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them more attention.
For instance
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, the child always
cry
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when no one cares about him after that he will see all the
familly aroud
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family around

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him so if we
be
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are

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very near to him, he will always listen to us. In conclusion, despite
poeple
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people

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having different points of view. In my opinion, I believe that doing an enjoyable activity with a child can develop
thier
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their

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skills more than
books
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Sentence Variety
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Grammar & Spelling
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Use of Examples
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Introduction & Conclusion
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Understanding & Support
You demonstrated a good understanding of the topic, with a clear stance supported by relevant examples.
Logical Structure
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