Some people dislike changes in their society and in their own lives, and want things to stay the same. Why do some people want things to stay the same? Why should change be regarded as something positive? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience. Write at least 250 words.

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Most

people

dislike the

changes

that are happening either in their community or in their own

life

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and

needed

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them to stay the same.

Firstly

this

essay will discuss

about

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the mindset of

people

who want their

surrounding

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surroundings

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to stay the same. Followed by that it will discuss why the

change

should be

consided

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considered

as positive. The majority of

people

don't like the modifications that are happening in their

socity

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society

life

. The main reason behind

this

is they get used to it and

frightened

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adopt

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adapt

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to those

changes

. They consider the

change

as one of the distractions in their routine. The best example

for

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this

scenario

will be

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my neighbour who lives

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the second floor

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our

appartment

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apartment

. He loves to go walking every morning in the park which is beside our flat. Recently,

people

in our community

has

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requested to build a gym in the place where the park is held.

This

action tremendously

distrubed

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disturbed

him and he argued to have that park as his walking place.

Although

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the whole community is against him, he

haven't

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changed his decision. After discussing with him we came to know that he is considering it as a drastic

change

in his

life

and don't want that

change

to be happened.

People

the

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society should consider the

change

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the begining

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begining

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beginning

of their new

life style

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lifestyle

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. The

changes

are common in everyone's

life

but they should learn how to

adopt

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adapt

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to those

changes

. The intervention of new things will make a person even

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stronger. The best example

for

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this

scenario is myself. I have been in India with my parents for almost

tweenty

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twenty

two years. But after my marriage, I

have

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moved to the United Kingdom with my husband. I

face

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faced

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a huge culture

change

and everything around me was changed including my work.

Although

everything around me was not the same, I have

approched

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approached

this

in a positive direction. And now I feel like living in my own home country. In conclusion,

changes

are common in everyone's

life

people

should learn how to

adopt

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adapt

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themselves to those

changes

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Task Achievement

To enhance Task Achievement, ensure your essay fully addresses all parts of the prompt. Expand on why change can be positive with more varied arguments and elaborate on the benefits for society as a whole.

Coherence & Cohesion

For better Coherence and Cohesion, work on connecting your ideas more smoothly. Transition words and phrases can help to guide the reader through your arguments more clearly.

Task Achievement

When providing examples, try to link them back to the larger argument more explicitly. This not only strengthens your examples but also adds depth to your essay.

Language

Consider revising sentences for clearer expression. Aim for accuracy in grammar and vocabulary to clearly convey your ideas and arguments.

Task Achievement

Effective use of personal examples to support arguments.

Coherence & Cohesion

Clear essay structure with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

350 words

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Status quo
Skepticism
Inevitable
Progression
Innovation
Cultural identity
Familiarity
Aversion
Adaptability
Comfort zone
Economic stability
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