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WRITING TASK 1 You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The diagram below shows how glass is recycled. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

WRITING TASK 1 You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The diagram below shows how glass is recycled. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The diagram illustrates the recycling process of glass.
Overall
, it can be seen that
this
 man-made cyclical process
comprising
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 five steps, starting with collecting glasses from
recycle
Correct article usage
the recycle
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 bin and concluding with the new products being delivered
to
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for
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 sale in
supermarket
Add an article
the supermarket
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.
To begin
 with, glasses that can be recycled are collected from the recycle bin before being sent to a treatment plant by a truck.
This
 is where the glasses are cleaned by washing and sterilizing in the
machine
, to kill bacteria and other unwanted substances.
Following
this
, it will be sent to crush into small pieces
aby
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by
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 a crushing
machine
 prior to being heated to
very
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 high temperature by a melting
machine
. The liquid from the previous step is used to produce a new product in a
molding
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moulding
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machine
. The glass can be made into any shape depending on the mold. After
molding
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moulding
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, the product will be sent off
to
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for
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 resale in the supermarket,
thus
 starting the cycle once again.
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words machine with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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