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The chart above shows information about various professions in the U.K. and their salaries. The table shows the average working hours per week for each profession

The chart above shows information about various professions in the U.K. and their salaries. The table shows the average working hours per week for each profession
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The chart and table compare the
salaries
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 when started and three years later indicated in
pounds
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 and average working
hours
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 per
week
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of
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for
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 various professions
such
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 as Police, Nurse,
Firefighther
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Firefighter
, and Underground
driver
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, in the United Kingdom, respectively.
Overall
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, it can be clearly observed that the
salaries
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 earned by underground drivers
was
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were
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 the highest ,
whereas
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 that of nurses
receive
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received
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 the lowest amount of monthly wages. Meanwhile, the average weekly working hour of the underground
driver
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work
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is
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 the fewest
hours
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.
To begin
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 with, at 50,000
pounds
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 the underground
driver
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 was the highest among the other professions when started working in the field, followed by firefighter, police, and nurse, at 40,000
pounds
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, 21,000
pounds
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, and 18,000
pounds
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, respectively.
However
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, it is interesting to note that in terms of
rise
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the rise
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of
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in
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salaries
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 after three years, every profession earned
extra
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an extra
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 amount of not more than 2,000
pounds
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. In regards
with
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to
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 average working
hours
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 per
week
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,
although
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 the underground
driver
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recieve
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receives
highest
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the highest
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salaries
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 and yet
working
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works
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 the fewest
hours
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 at 36
hours
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 per
week
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 only.
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While the
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The
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firefighter
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firefighters
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 whose income almost
outwin
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earned
 the underground
driver
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work
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worked
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 the hardest at 55
hours
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 per
week
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, followed by police and
nurse
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nurses
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 at 40 and 38
hours
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 per
week
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, respectively.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words salaries, pounds, hours, week, driver with synonyms.
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