IELTS Writing Correction Service /
Writing Samples /
Band 7.5

The chart below shows the number of households in the US by their annual income in 2007, 2011 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the number of households in the US by their annual income in 2007, 2011 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
#households #income #summarise #information #features #comparisons
The bar graph below illustrates the number of households
comparing
Change the form of the verb
compared
show examples
 to the salaries which took place in
US
Correct article usage
the US
show examples
 during three years that started in 2007 and finished in 2015. At first glance at the bar graph, the third group remained stable during the whole period. Another noticeable feature occurred in 2015, at that time, the gap between the fourth and fifth categories reached its peak.
To begin
 with, during 2007, on the one hand, the fourth
class
 hit the lowest point;
on the other hand
, the fifth
class
 whose salary equals a hundred thousand or above hit the highest point. The category that takes under 500 thousand surpassed the first and third groups. After that in 2011, The second
class
 equalled the highest number, and the fourth category remained in the lowest level.
Moreover
, in 2015 the 4th group showed an upward and equalled approximately 33 Million,
while
 the second group slightly decreased and
it
Correct pronoun usage
apply
show examples
was less than 30 Million.
In
Change preposition
On
show examples
 a final note, the second bar overcame the first one during the whole duration;
besides
 that, the third
class
 surpassed the fourth one during the three years.
Submitted by haneenalnetaif on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
▼
Vocabulary: Replace the words class with synonyms.
▼
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
▼
Topic Vocabulary:
  • household distribution
  • income brackets
  • annual income
  • percentage change
  • trend analysis
  • income group
  • significant increase/decrease
  • steady growth/decline
  • fluctuations
  • compared to
  • in contrast
  • notably
  • median income
  • poverty line
  • economic factors
What to do next:
Look at other essays: