Many parents today organise extra classes for their children after school and at the weekends. Do you feel that this is a worthwhile thing to do or do you feel children have enough education at school?

In today's world, there is an urgent need to address the
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of environmental pollution. Some believe that it is better to deal with these issues on a world scale,
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others consider that ecological problems can be solved at the national level. And my opinion leans more toward the global level of solving
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problem
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. I think so because time has always been moving forward. And the moment when it was possible to solve the
problem
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only with the help of
people
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's unity is long gone. Now dirt and garbage float in the oceans as islands, rot in millions of dumps and decompose, infecting our
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.
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,
people
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are already used to the disgusting treatment
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the environment, so it will be extremely difficult to gather the necessary number of
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to clean the entire Earth. Since the
planet
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cannot be properly cleaned on a national level, only with involved government
people
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can
people
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do something with it. With everyone's
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we could improve the environment many times over. So much technology can be used,
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many human hands can help in a collective business. On
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basis, I believe that the government would be very beneficial in the issue affecting the ecology.
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, I would like to say that
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government assistance would be very helpful in
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case. Together we can definitely clean our
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from all the garbage on it.
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, it is important not to pollute the
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with your own hands, because it is important not only
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together, but
also
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to understand the
problem
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ourselves.

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Try to provide more specific examples to support your points. This will make your argument stronger and clearer to the reader.
coherence and cohesion
Enhance the link between your ideas. Use linking words like 'firstly', 'next', and 'finally' to help the reader follow your thoughts easily.
coherence and cohesion
Make sure to clearly state your main point in the introduction and summarize it effectively in your conclusion.
task achievement
You have a clear opinion about the topic, which is good for the task.
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You have mentioned the importance of teamwork and government involvement in solving ecological problems.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Topic Vocabulary:
  • reinforce learning
  • personalized attention
  • student-to-teacher ratios
  • comprehensive coverage
  • academic and non-academic subjects
  • well-rounded development
  • address specific weaknesses
  • grade improvement
  • performance in exams
  • leisure time
  • burnout
  • educational opportunities
  • socio-economic disparity
  • over-scheduling
  • balanced approach
  • after-school programs
  • weekend tutoring
  • additional practice
  • constructive criticism
  • holistic growth
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