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The graph below shows the average consumption of cheese per person in england, scotland, wales and northern ireland between 1980 and 2020

The graph below shows the average consumption of cheese per person in england, scotland, wales and northern ireland between 1980 and 2020
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The line graph illustrates the average
cheese
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consumption
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 per person in four different countries (
England
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, Scotland, Wales, and Northern Ireland) over 40 years from 1980 to 2020. Units are measured in
kilograms
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.
Overall
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, it is obvious that the
consumption
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 of
cheese
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 per person in
England
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 and Scotland rose during the period given
while
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 for Wales and Northern Ireland, it dropped.
In addition
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,
England
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 was the leader in
cheese
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consumption
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 throughout.
According to
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 the line graph, the average of
cheese
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 consumed in
England
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 went down gradually from above 100
kilograms
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 to just around 80
kilograms
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 in 2020.
Likewise
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, the figure for
cheese
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 consumed in Scotland started at above 75
kilograms
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 in the first year, and
then
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 after reaching a peak of a little more than 100
kilograms
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 in 1990, it dropped down to around 50
kilograms
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at the end
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 of the given period.
On the other hand
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, the amount of
cheese
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 consumed in Northern Ireland increased dramatically from more or less 10
kilograms
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 in 1980 to just over 50
kilograms
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 in the
last
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 year.
Similarly
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,
cheese
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consumption
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 in Wales climbed slightly from under 50
kilograms
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 in 1980 to more than 75
kilograms
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 in 2020.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 77%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words cheese, consumption, england, kilograms with synonyms.
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