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WRITING TASK 1 You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The bar chart below shows estimated world illiteracy rates by region and by gender for the last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

WRITING TASK 1 You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The bar chart below shows estimated world illiteracy rates by region and by gender for the last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.
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Presented for consideration is a bar chart detailing figures for the proportion of residents who are unable to write or read, broken down by gender in the previous year. The units are measured on
percentage
 (%). Generally, speaking, the
percentage
 of
females
 around the world was
llower
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lower
 than the opposite sex, with the exception of developed countries.
Additionally
, the rate of South Asian citizens who
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illiterated
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illiterate
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 any other region,
whereas
Arab
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the Arab
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 States experienced the most
considerble
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considerable
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the two
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 genders. Looking at the bar chart in
futher
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further
details
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, where Sub-Saharan Africa, Arab states and South Asia rate
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 illiteracy was higher than
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 remaining areas, In regards to South Asia, the
percentage
od
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of
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 man
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who hace
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hace
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have
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write
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 was approximately 56% compared to the woman was nearly one third. Turning to Arab states and Sub-Saharan Africa, their rates of males
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this
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social
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 around 30% and just over 31%, respectively. Regarding
to
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the opposite sex, its
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proportion
proportions
were
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 about 49% and 52% in that order. Turning to the three final categories, the gap between sexes
less
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 notable. With respect to East Asia and Oceania, there was exactly 20% of males and less than 9% of
females
 who lack
of
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reading and writing skills,
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 to just around 11% of males and almost 10% of
females
 in Latin
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 and
Carribean
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Caribbean
.
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the
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contrary
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contrast
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of
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 developed nations, the
females
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female
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percentage
 was about 3%, which was higher than the remaining sexes at just a tiny fraction (1%).
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, females with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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