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Some claim that studying abroad has great benefits for a student’s home country. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#student’s #home #country
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Nowadays, education is really important for children. Some people think that studying foreign has more and more beneficial choices for a student’s
home
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country
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. I think, both studying abroad and
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home
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country
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are
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have some good experiments for everyone. In my opinion, I disagree with the above statement because I strongly trust in the students, which are
hard working
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, the boys and the girls will find
the
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 way to prove their
skill
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 no matter what they have faced.They can pass it with their mindset. First of all, studying in another
country
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have
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 many good
experiments
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experiences
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,
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besides
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the environment
have
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has
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 changed from a dairy routine that will
made
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make
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 the children
growing
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 up in different ways, they will find new friends from learning their culture or they will find
new
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 food that they have not ever
test
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.
Secondly
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, The learners who are
the
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 student’s
home
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country
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 do not have any weak points ,since they have graduated. They do not have to
compared
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 with others. For
instane
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instance
, the
one
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ones
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 that
growth
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this
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 way can create their own ways to make them very happy in their life.To make easier ways to explain that some of them might love to plant a tree
,
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if they have
move
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 to
another places
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another place
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. They not only have to find the solutions to plant there but
also
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 the main factor is different
environment
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environments
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 and different seeds
it does
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do
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 not
did
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 the same. In conclusion, I disagree that studying in different
countrys
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countries
have
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has
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 big
beneficials
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beneficial
 things for a student’s
home
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country
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. Because learning is not
control
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controlled
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 by places.
Every one
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 can
approach
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 all of
information
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the information
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 from
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the internet
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internet
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Internet
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. You can
searching
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 for anything you want
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