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The graphs below show current rates of secondary and higher education people in various parts of the worlds.

The graphs below show current rates of secondary and higher education people in various parts of the worlds.
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A glance at the column graphs delineates information about the commensurability of secondary and higher
education
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 among men and women from diverse nations worldwide.
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, it can be perceived that the proportion of secondary
education
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 outnumbered staggeringly those of tertiary other than SSA.
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, feminine enthusiast numbers surpass the other genders for both educations in Europe, unlike in other areas. Concerning secondary
education
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, Europeans were allocated the highest population, accompanied by 90% and 100% for men and women, respectively. In a relatively similar percentage, masculine pupils in East Asia have just under 49 per cent and approximately 42% in Latin America,
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 these are almost 43 and 48 for the other gender in the latter and the former, respectively. SSA,
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, has the
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 by a negligible 8% for boys, which is some half of girls. Of all these regions, meanwhile, Europe's continent still retains the first ranking in higher
education
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, somewhere in the vicinity of 50% for women and a lower 42% for men.
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 was followed by the other parts of the world with less values. It is noteworthy that in stark contrast with respect to all amounts of genders, male students in higher
education
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 are more proponents than the prior grade.

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words education with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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