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In the future, nobody wiil buy printed newspapers or books because they will be able to read everything they want online without paying. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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It is expected that in the next couple of years, printed
books
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 and newspapers will no longer be as popular as they are now, and
people
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 will be able to find their favourite
books
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 and
news
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 online free of charge. I think that with the development of technology, following the
news
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 through social media will become more convenient, but some
people
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 don’t like to read
books
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 on their devices and prefer to read them in print, and I partially agree with that statement. One advantage of online broadcasting channels is that they get the
news
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 out much faster than newspapers do. With the development of internet infrastructure, it will soon be possible to get the
news
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 out to the world as soon as it happens.
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, another advantage is that
people
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 can buy a book online for a lower price than if they were to buy it in paper format.
However
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, some
people
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 find it difficult to read
books
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 on laptops or phones. These devices tire the eyes and make it difficult for
people
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 to read for long periods of time. Printed
books
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 allow the reader to highlight the content and
also
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 write notes on the pages.
Moreover
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, students often find it difficult to solve math problems on a computer screen when they need to solve them on paper.
To conclude
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, it is believed that in the future getting the
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 and
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 reading
books
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 will be online
while
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people
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's eyes can be affected by electronic devices and they would rather buy paper ones. Both ways have their own merits and demerits, but it is likely that
people
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 will read writings online.
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Introduction
Make sure to introduce both sides of the argument in your introduction to prepare the reader for the discussion.
Task Response
Provide specific examples to support your arguments. This enhances the persuasiveness and relevance of your points.
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To improve coherence, try to use a wider range of linking words and phrases to connect your ideas more smoothly.
Structure
Your essay has a clear structure with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion.
Task Response
You effectively addressed the prompt by discussing both the advantages and disadvantages of online and printed reading materials.
Coherence & Cohesion
The use of paragraphs to separate different ideas helps the reader to follow your arguments easily.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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