Students should pay full cost for their own study, because university education benefits individuals rather than society. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#students #cost #study #university #education #individuals #society

✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?

The educational programme of educational

institution

Fix the agreement mistake

institutions

show examples

benefits people who pay all costs for personal study. I partly agree with the statement. educational institution

create

Change the verb form

creates

show examples

a programme which suits everybody, it means that the awareness that enlistment acquire in higher education in general and people who want

further

Linking Words

education must pay an extra fee to meet their needs of know-how.

As a result

Linking Words

, colleges will be able to provide understandable pieces of information for most

admission

Fix the agreement mistake

admissions

show examples

Thus

Linking Words

, demanding extra cost will benefit both admission and

academy

Correct article usage

the academy

show examples

in softening provided proficiency and ability to acquire.

However

Linking Words

, it may be inconvenient for studious people who have

Add an article

the

show examples

poor condition of live living.

in other words

Linking Words

, some potentially brilliant enlistment may miss the opportunity to gain higher expertise because of lacking money. To tackle

this

Linking Words

issue, educational

institution

Fix the agreement mistake

institutions

show examples

should give

scholarship

Fix the agreement mistake

scholarships

show examples

to excellent students

instead

Linking Words

of making money for them.

Thus

Linking Words

, encouraging enlistment is needed

besides

Linking Words

requiring financial value. In conclusion, admission should pay more free to gain complete information.

However

Linking Words

, a school needs to think of helping

special

Add an article

a special

the special

show examples

person to make more geniuses for their country

Submitted by [email protected] on Fri May 10 2024

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Task Achievement

Strive for clarity in your argument. Your position should be unmistakably clear, especially in the introduction.

Task Achievement

Consider developing your main points with more specific examples or evidence to strengthen your argument.

Coherence & Cohesion

Focus on improving your essay structure for better flow. Introduce clear paragraphs for each new idea.

Coherence & Cohesion

Work on linking your ideas more effectively. Transitional phrases can help guide the reader from one point to the next.

General

Pay attention to your grammar and vocabulary choices to ensure precision and variety.

Task Achievement

You have presented a balanced viewpoint, considering both sides of the argument.

Coherence & Cohesion

Your essay addresses the topic directly and attempts to discuss relevant issues.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

8
Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
0
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8
Grammar mistakes
detected issues

<4

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

182 words

🚀 Prepare for IELTS writing section today!

Unlimited Task 1 & Task 2 checks
Practice with essays, charts, and letters.
Personalized suggestions & mistake analysis
Spot every mistake and boost your score.
Topic ideas & vocabulary helpers
Expand your ideas and use the right words.
Progress tracking
Watch your writing improve with every practice.

Topic Vocabulary:

beneficiary
accountability
economic mobility
social inequalities
subsidized education
vocational training
deliberate choice
earning potential
public funding
societal benefits
innovation
self-financing
social mobility
economic equality
grants
scholarships

What to do next:

Look at other essays:

5.5
band
Detailed descriptions of crimes on newspaper and TV can have bad consequences on society, so this kind of information should be restricted on media. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
In today’s society, many detailed crime descriptions flood newspapers and TV. In my opinion, although the dissemination could lead to negative influences on society, an outright ban on this kind of information should not be imposed on mass media altogether.
4.5
band
Today more and more tourists are visiting places where conditions are difficult, such as the Sahara desert or the Antarctic. What are the benefits and disadvantages for tourists who visit such place?
In this contemporary epoch, the tourisim industry plays a vital role in the economy around the world. Nevertheless, nowadays, tourists would love to spend their vacation in palces with harsh conditions, namely deserts, north and south pole. In this essay, I will elaborate on the pros and cons for the tourists.
<4
band
We cannot help everyone in the world that needs help, so we should only be concerned with our own communities and countries. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
many people hold the view that we cannot support everyone in the world that needs help, so we should focus on problem in our communities anh countries. Personally, I totally disagree with this view because i think that we should try to help as many people as possiable.
5.5
band
private transport is creating problems for people. What are these problems and how we can solve this?
Transportation owned by an individual is starting to generate problems for people.The problem of private transport‌is caused by SOV and can result in different kind of pollution.The possible solutions to this problem will be discussed in the following paragraphs.
6.5
band
The birth rate in most developed countries is predicted to begin to fall over the next 50 years. By 2030 it is estimated that over one-third of the population in most developed countries will be aged 65 and over: What effects will these predictions have on developed countries if they prove true? What can be done now to deal with this situation?
The predicted decline in birth rates and the aging population in developed countries will have significant social and economic effects. By 2030, with over one-third of the population aged 65 and over, several key challenges will arise.

Students should pay full cost for their own study, because university education benefits individuals rather than society. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Word Count

Detailed descriptions of crimes on newspaper and TV can have bad consequences on society, so this kind of information should be restricted on media. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Today more and more tourists are visiting places where conditions are difficult, such as the Sahara desert or the Antarctic. What are the benefits and disadvantages for tourists who visit such place?

We cannot help everyone in the world that needs help, so we should only be concerned with our own communities and countries. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

private transport is creating problems for people. What are these problems and how we can solve this?