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Online communication is becoming more popular than face-to-face communication in many companies. Do the advantages of this outweigh its disadvantages?

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The use of online meeting
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 by various businesses has increased
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tremendously
 over the past few years, eliminating the need for physical meetings.
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,
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 comes with its pros and cons the following are some of each . With
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 pandemic
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and
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 the best option for a
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 of companies to communicate with each other
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specially
especially
 overseas as it provides a
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 of convenience in regard to both cost, time and the social distance that was
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acquired
required
 at that time.
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, an urgent meeting can be easily formed with two companies on different continents like Europe and Africa.
On the other hand
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,
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also
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 comes with its cons as company employees need to be familiar with new
apps
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 and how to use them efficiently.
Apps
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 as Google Teams commonly used by businesses had a
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 of security issues at lunch and
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 required a
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 of updates to
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 of the app and the way of using it . in conclusion,
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 online
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 utilized by businesses in connecting with each other can be beneficial physical contact might be needed in some eventually .
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Language accuracy
Remember to proofread your essay to correct spelling and grammar mistakes, like 'tommendislly' should be 'tremendously', and 'Google Teams' should be 'Google Meet' or 'Microsoft Teams'.
Grammar & complexity
Consider using varied sentence structures to improve the readability of your essay. Introducing more complex sentences could enhance your writing.
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Coherence & cohesion
Clarify and organise your ideas more effectively by ensuring each paragraph has a clear central topic. This will improve the logical flow of your essay.
Balanced argument
You provided a balanced view on the topic, considering both advantages and disadvantages of online communication.
Structure
Your essay includes a relevant introduction and conclusion, which effectively sets up your discussion and summarises your main points.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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