the two pie charts below show the material status of the populations of Canada and australia Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features , and make comparisons where relevant

the two pie charts below show the material status of the populations of Canada and australia 

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features , and make comparisons where relevant
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discuss
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the material status of
canada
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Canada
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and
australia
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between 6 different
percentage
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percentages
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of
population
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the population
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.
Overall
the most dominant
percantage
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percentage
of
maritual
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marital
status of both
canada
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and
australia
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Australian
population
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was
saparated
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separated
but not divorced and
maried
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married
remarried
.
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that
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we can notice that the
percentage
of married people in
australia
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is
approximatley
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approximately
the double amount of those in
canada
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and that there is no
any
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percentage
of
same sex
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marriage in
australia's
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population
. To get
in
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details
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the highest
percentage
in
canada's
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population
are the separated but not divorced
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53% and the married
for
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29% .
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the least amount
population
are the category of widowed and never married for 7% for both ,
in addition
to divorced and
same sex
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marriage for 1% and 3%
respectivley
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respectively
.
Marover
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the highest
to
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population
are married and separated but not divorced
for
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46% and 41% respectively and
for
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the lower
percentage
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5%, 6% and 2% for single, window and divorced.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "in addition".
Introduction: The introduction is missing.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
Vocabulary: Replace the words canada, australia, percentage, population with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 5 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • marital status
  • population
  • pie charts
  • percentage
  • categories
  • Married
  • Single
  • Divorced
  • Widowed
  • distribution
  • noticeable trends
  • comparison
  • significantly different
  • similarities
  • striking differences
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