The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking the visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two period

The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking the visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two period
The table illustrates how many
visitors
visited the Ashdown
Museum
the
year
before and the following
year
it was refurbished.
Also
, the pie charts show the result of research asking
visitors
how they felt about their visit during the same two periods.
Overall
, the
visitors
number
which they visited the Ashdown
Museum
during the
year
after
refurbishment
was significantly higher than the
visitors
figure which that
visitors
who visited that
museum
during the
year
before
refurbishment
Firstly
, the researches illustrate that the
number
of very dissatisfied
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visitors
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visitor
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visitors
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numbers gradually minimized
year
after
refurbishment
.
Also
, those who answered dissatisfied with the survey of satisfaction remarkably decreased the
year
after
refurbishment
too. After the development of the
museum
, the very satisfied visitor
number
was greatly maximized. And the satisfied visitor
number
increased
similarly
to very satisfied
visitors
.
However
, the quality of
visitors
who did not get responses to the survey of satisfaction did not change in the same two periods.
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