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The table below gives information about rail transport in four counties.

The table below gives information about rail transport in four counties.
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Contained in the table is the information pertaining to the railway system between four nations. From an observational perspective,
China
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 dominated other origins in terms of the traveller's number and the individual's travelling distance with the exception of the weight of goods in which
Canada
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 took the lead.
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,
Malaysia
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 and the
UAE
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 have relatively the same recorded figures. Looking at the table in
further
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 detail, apart from the metro,
China
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 experienced 27 million people using rail transport which was approximately 5 times greater than that of
Malaysia
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. Ranking below that was the
UAE
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 with 5.5 million people
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Canada
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 witnessed only 0.3 million people. Moving on the average distance per person,
China
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 once again outnumbered the rest with 1980
kilometres
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 per passenger.
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, the
UAE
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's regular length was 780
kilometres
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 and
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Malaysia's
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Malaysia
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 was 10
kilometres
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 shorter.
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,
Canada
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 has the lowest radius travelled per head with just only 80
kilometres
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. Turning to the statistic of goods weight, ranked in first place was
Canada
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 with 28.20
billion
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tons
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. Following up was
China
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 with around 5
billion
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tons
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 lower than that of
Canada
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. Eventually,
Malaysia
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 and the
UAE
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 reported 22.2
billion
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tons
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 and 21.9
billion
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tons
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 respectively.
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