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The chart shows the total distance travelled by passengers on five types of transport in the UK between 1990 and 2000.

The chart shows the total distance travelled by passengers on five types of transport in the UK between 1990 and 2000.
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The chart illustrates the total amount of
distance
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 travelled by
passengers
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 on five means of transportation in the UK from 1990 to 2000.
Overall
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, the total
distance
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 travelled by five types of transport has increased in number, except for motorbikes and bicycles went down. The figures for the total
distance
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 travelled by air increased the most,
while
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 by bicycle went down. In 1990, the total
distance
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passengers
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 travelled by bus was the highest, about 42
billion
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kilometres
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, followed by the second rail, approximately 32 million
kilometres
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.
In contrast
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, the
distance
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 travelled by air was the lowest, about 3
billion
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kilometres
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. After 10 years
passengers
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 travelling by air increased the most, at 6
billion
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kilometres
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 but still lower than bus and rail which had increased by 3 and 4
billion
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kilometres
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.
On the other hand
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, the
distance
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 travelled by motorbike and bicycle stood at 5 and 7
billion
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kilometres
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. After 10 years both of them declined significantly, from 7 to 4
billion
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 and 5 to 3 for motorbikes and bicycles.
Finally
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, the total
kilometres
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 travelled by
passengers
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 increased from 100 in 1990 to 110
billion
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kilometres
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 in 2000.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words distance, passengers, billion, kilometres with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "went down" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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