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thw graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040.

thw graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040.
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The line graph illustrates data about the number of people living in 4 Asian countries over
51-year
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a 51-year
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 period from 1970 to 2020, with assumptions by 2040. The unit of measurement is percentage.
Overall
, it is apparently seen that the population saw a
rose
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 in all countries, namely
Philippines
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the Philippines
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, Malaysia, Thailand and Indonesia. It is crystal clear that the number of people increased sharply from 1990 in Malaysia (from 45%)
while
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was
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decreased
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for
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Philippines
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the Philippines
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.
However
, there was a rise in 2010 and predicted that would be kept by 2040. Meanwhile, the figures
of
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 Thailand and Indonesia had a steady
rose
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,
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 and
assumed
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 to be at 45% and 60%
accordingly
.
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