The maps below show the city layout of Brisbane between 1975 and the current day. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The maps below show the city layout of Brisbane between 1975 and the current day. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The two maps show how Brisbane
city
has
been
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changed from 1975 to nowadays. It is noteworthy that the
city
showed totally a simple layout in 1975.
This
city
were
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was
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splited
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split
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into two by
Brisban
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the Brisban
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River
.
Thus
, small amounts of houses had been located at the upper-left side of the
river
and few factories had been placed at the lower-left side of the
river
. One ferry on the
river
was the only
trasportation
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transportation
which was able to connect between two parts of the
city
. The map clearly shows that the
city
changed substantially with several
newly-constructured
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newly constructed
buildings these days. It is
noteable
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notable
noticeable
that few houses were displaced by big
appartments
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apartments
.
In addition
, all factories were demolished and restaurants, a supermarket, and a hospital
has
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newly built at that place.
Also
, people can walk around freely thanks to Victoria Bridge, so, the ferry disappeared.
Lastly
, a park next to
appartments
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apartments
will be
constructured
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constructed
structured
in 2050.
Overall
,
it is clear that
Brisban
city
has been well developed. In 1975, there were only residents and factories that we could see.
However
, after several years, the
city
has
occupied
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with essential infrastructures including a hospital, a supermarket and restaurants.
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