The line graph gives information about the number of Iranian, Greek and Turkish students who enrolled at Sheffield University between 2005 and 2009.

The line graph gives information about the number of Iranian, Greek and Turkish students who enrolled at Sheffield University between 2005 and 2009.
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The line chart provides data on the number of
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from Iran, Greece and Turkey accepted into Sheffield University from 2005 to 2009.
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, the Iranian and Turkish pupils witnessed an increase towards the end of the year surpassing the Greek representatives who went from the highest, dropped significantly to the lowest. Looking at the group of individuals who experienced an increased trajectory in enrolment, Sheffield University received just above 20 Turkish
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in 2005,
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rose continuously to a peak of about 120 admitted by 2009.
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, Iran which was the second-ranked in 2005 saw a marginal increase from 40
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to 60 by 2006,
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figure grew slowly to about 150 in 2008, which
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soared to 160 by 2009.
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, the Greek
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,
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to varying extents, observed a constant dip throughout the season, beginning at 180 to dropping marginally to around 159 the following year, from there, plummeting to nearly 70, remaining stable for 1-year, and reduced slightly by 10 in 2009.
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