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The chart below compare the number of people per household in the UK in 1981 and 2001.

The chart below compare the number of people per household in the UK in 1981 and 2001.
#people #household #uk
The chart represents the
number
 of people per
household
 in the United Kingdom, categorized into 6
differents
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group
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, in 1981 and twenty years later.
Overall
, it can be clearly observed that the
number
 of two
persons
lived
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 in a
house
 was the highest,
whereas
 that of the largest family sized with 6
persons
 was the fewest both in the given timeframe.
To begin
 with, in 1981,
at
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31
household
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 was the greatest
number
 of residents per
house
 among the other family sizes, followed by
the
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3
 3-
persons
,
4-
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4 persons
persons
, and
1-
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1 person
persons
,
at
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20
peoples
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people
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,
at
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18
peoples
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people
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, and
at
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17
peoples
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people
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, respectively.
While
 that of the largest family size of 6
peoples
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people
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 in a
house
 was 6
household
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households
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 only. In regards
with
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, in 2001, the family of 5-
peoples
 remained the first rank at 34
peoples
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people
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.
However
, it is interesting to note that at 26
household
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households
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instead
a
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one
persons
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person
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 per
household
 surpassed the
number
 of
3-
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3 persons
persons
 in the past. The
number
 of larger
family
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families
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 sized range from 4 to 6
persons
 per
house
 was slightly dropped about 3 to 4
household
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households
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.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, household, persons, house, peoples with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 5 times.
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