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The chart below compare the number of people per household in the UK in 1981 and 2001.

The chart below compare the number of people per household in the UK in 1981 and 2001.
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The chart represents the
number
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 of people per
household
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 in the United Kingdom, categorized into 6
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group
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, in 1981 and twenty years later.
Overall
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, it can be clearly observed that the
number
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 of two
persons
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lived
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 in a
house
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 was the highest,
whereas
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 that of the largest family sized with 6
persons
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 was the fewest both in the given timeframe.
To begin
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 with, in 1981,
at
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31
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household
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households
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 was the greatest
number
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 of residents per
house
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 among the other family sizes, followed by
the
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3
 3-
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,
4-
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4 persons
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, and
1-
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1 person
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,
at
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20
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peoples
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people
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,
at
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18
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peoples
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people
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, and
at
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17
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peoples
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people
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, respectively.
While
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 that of the largest family size of 6
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peoples
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people
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 in a
house
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 was 6
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household
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households
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 only. In regards
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, in 2001, the family of 5-
peoples
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 remained the first rank at 34
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peoples
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people
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.
However
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, it is interesting to note that at 26
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household
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households
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instead
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a
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apply
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one
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persons
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person
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 per
household
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 surpassed the
number
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 of
3-
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3 persons
persons
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 in the past. The
number
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 of larger
family
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families
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 sized range from 4 to 6
persons
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 per
house
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 was slightly dropped about 3 to 4
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household
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households
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.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, household, persons, house, peoples with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 5 times.
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